Jasmine Hart

I agree with Fand about the punctuation. You don't need an apostrophe in "its" as 'it's" means "it is".Honestly, this didn't feel all that fresh to me. Maybe try coming ...

It's nice, and you've definetely mastered the acrostic. I don't love it, but that seems to be more the fault of the format than anything else. In parts, I felt ...

This was really good. I'd put a hyphen between "sun" and "scorched", but, other than that, there's nothing I'd want changed.

I agree that this isn't your best work, but your descriptions are beautiful as usual, and your enjambment made it flow beautifully, which really complimented the made me feel very ...

I like it, though not as much as some of your other work. I'd scrap lines eleven to fourteen, as I felt that they were out of synch with the ...

This was really great. I loved your theme, and you expressed yourself beautifully.The ending was really great. I'm not too sure about the last three lines of the first stanza, ...

I love it, especially "sand-tangled hair", the whole second stanza, and "chopstick-thin wrists". My only slight problem is the last line, as it seems unfinished. What did you have no ...

I love it. As always, your writing is beautiful and fresh. I really can't find fault with this. If I was nitpicking, I'd say "rock back and forth" isn't overly ...

I really enjoyed this. I just think there's something very pure about it, and I liked how the story developed. It was really vivid. I'm not sure about the third ...

It's really very good, but I think that some of your rhythm is a bit off in places. I'd try saying it aloud so you can see this for yourself, ...

The imagery in this is really vivid and beautiful.Your enjambment is perfect, and your alliteration is great.I love "printless the last stanza,I think the fourth line jars a little. It ...

What's already been said about this is good. The only new thing that I have to say is that I didn't like: "What's so fun about this game?" It just ...

Thank you for this article!I love it.

Hi Sab.Welcome! Ditto everyone's offers of help. I hope that you enjoy it here. Alainna's right, don't worry about not finishing. I used never finish. Just don't write anything you ...

Hey.Nice to see you here. Welcome!Hope that you enjoy it. Jasmine